Peer Review: Peter

Okay, yeah, Peter already turned in his paper so this won’t exactly help him for that. But I’m sure he can look at these gifs and grow as a human being.

Peter:

Me:

First of all your title was genius and had me like

and then I read your intro… but I’m pretty sure you left out a word in one of your sentences.

But it’s all good cause you’re an A+ human being and you can do whatever you want.

You seem to wrap up your paragraphs without much analysis – just when I think you’re gonna get into something, the paragraph ends!

I do love your essay’s topic, though. Women fighting women is not what we want, we should stand united. GIRL POWER.

Overall, this was a good essay. Congrats on being awesome.

And there it is. Did I do it right?

Draft Review for Julieta and Maggie!

Julieta!

Hey! I really enjoyed reading what you have of your essay so far.

Your topic is really interesting and I like where you’ve decided to take it in the context of the novel.

Your phrasing and sentence structure is really great! Almost everything you said made sense.

But I do think you could use a bit more explanation when first stating your topic. Are you for or against it? Or are you weighing the pros and cons objectively? Also, you might introduce how it fits into the story thematically or on the larger scale, then go in and explore the specifics.

But overall I think your paper is coming together and I wish you the best!

Good Job!

Maggie!

I think your topic is really awesome too! I really enjoyed reading what you have so far, and am excited to see where you’ll take it!

You have a lot of great ideas swirling around, and they’re all very important points within the book!

However, I think you should really focus on organizing your thoughts a little more, and try to tie everything back up to your main points. I know it’s a hard thing to do but I believe in you!

So just keep on going and have fun with it!

Peer Review- Bella

I know we are both stressing about how our essays are not exactly coming together as we had hoped

But when I was reading over your’s I was just like: Get it girl. Great argument. Great Ideas.

Just add in some more citations to strengthen your argument so that it doesn’t fall short of its potential!

keep up the good work with the rest of your paper

You can do it!

Peer Review Feedback – Julieta

You’re topic is awesome and I think your paper is going to turn out great!

You’re paper is almost done!!

You’re So Close!!

Just don’t forget to integrate your quotes more!

And you can always add more explanation

But overall your paper is fabulous!

 

Peer Feedback – Maggie

I thought the topic you chose for your paper, superbugs, is interesting!!

The major thing you have to do is elaborate some more on the topics you have.

You don’t need to add much more! The topics you discuss are good!

You got this!

And remember …

Peter Scales – Gif Feedback

You got started a bit too quickly…

But I understood everything that was going on.

You kept using similar words and it felt a bit flat…

Until I got to that one fantastic paragraph

Your points were well thought out

You had great sources

But you lacked flow

You’re almost there

Good luck!

Peer Feedback – Lauren

Lauren:

I think the topic you chose is very interesting!

You still need to research more and incorporate it into your paper! Which I know can be difficult!

And you could potentially feel like so…

But overall your paper and topic were great and interesting!

Peer Review: Frances 2 Katherine

I’ve never worked with you before so I was like “Alright, new buddy, I’m down let’s do this.”

Getting into the paper, getting into your style, making subtle grammar corrections without you noticing

The structure could have been a bit more compact and THERE WAS SO MUCH EVIDENCE.

But it was good evidence. Strong evidence.

And by the end of the paper, I realized that you knew exactly what was going down and you were headed in a great direction

Not that I was worried

With a little work, I am positive your paper will be spectacular.

❤ 🙂

To Danny

I think you have a really interesting topic…

Remember to choose your sources wisely!

Stay focused and on topic!

Don’t give up!

Carry on the wayward son…

Gif Response to Zack Short!!!!11!!!

Ok, so when I read the idea for your paper I was all like

It was super interesting! You were really able to pull me into the topic you were talking about

Your paper was formatted really well, but I was a little doubtful of if everything would make sense

But you proved everything you said really well!

Though, sometimes your sentences were a little confusing…

And you mispelled a few things (or like, one)

Despite that, though, it all made sense!

It was a great paper overall…

and honestly I wish my paper was as good as yours.